Week 11 Story: Krishcules Defeats the Wind
There was once a child, his name was Krishcules. However, Krishcules was no ordinary child. He would always strive to become something greater than himself. As a child he was raised as any other child would be raised. Nothing about Krishcules was extraordinary.
That was until he met someone who recognized that Krishcules had something special about him. This man was, Philoctetes or Phil for short, he had trained all the great warriors on earth. Anyone who was anything was trained by Phil. Unfortunately for Phil, everyone he trained ended up failing in battle, which led to their deaths. This caused Phil to give up on training and live a normal life in a normal town surrounded by normal people.
However, everything changed when Phil ran into Krishcules. Right away Phil knew Krishcules was part god. This was Phil's big break. He would finally redeem himself as a trainer and create the greatest warrior the world has ever seen.
He told Krishcules that he wanted to train him to be an extrordinary warrior. Krishcules could not believe that his big break was finally happening. All he ever wanted in life was to be something more and here the greatest trainer of in the world was offering to train him for free. Krishcules thought it was too good to be true and did not believe that this man was actually the great Philoctetes.
Phil told Krishcules that he could prove who he was. He took Krishcules to his home. The entire house was decorated with statues of all those who he had trained. The statues each had a weapon in hand. Only the great Philoctetes could have these weapons, so Krishcules knew that he must be telling the truth. He agreed to the training.
Ten years had passed. Krishcules was now a great warrior ready to fight anything that threatens his people. The issue with being so powerful is that it invites challenge. The wind Titan took Krishcules as a challenge.
He approached him and saw Krishcules as nothing more than a mere mortal. The Titan started to lay ruin to Krishcules village.
Krishcules sprang into action. Using his mighty grip he choked the Titan. The Titan was unable to breathe and died at Krishcules hands.
Author's Note: I combined "Hercules" and the story of Krishna fighting Trinavarta, the wind demon. In "Hercules" Hercules is the son of Zeus and grows up thinking he is normal, but then a great trainer named Phil finds him and trains him. He ends up defeating many beasts, ultimately having to fight the 4 elemental Titans, one of which was the wind Titan. In the Krishna tale, Krishna chokes the wind demon, Trinavarta to death to protect his village. I saw many similarities between the two stories and decided to combine them.
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Epified Author: Vijayendra Mohanty
That was until he met someone who recognized that Krishcules had something special about him. This man was, Philoctetes or Phil for short, he had trained all the great warriors on earth. Anyone who was anything was trained by Phil. Unfortunately for Phil, everyone he trained ended up failing in battle, which led to their deaths. This caused Phil to give up on training and live a normal life in a normal town surrounded by normal people.
However, everything changed when Phil ran into Krishcules. Right away Phil knew Krishcules was part god. This was Phil's big break. He would finally redeem himself as a trainer and create the greatest warrior the world has ever seen.
He told Krishcules that he wanted to train him to be an extrordinary warrior. Krishcules could not believe that his big break was finally happening. All he ever wanted in life was to be something more and here the greatest trainer of in the world was offering to train him for free. Krishcules thought it was too good to be true and did not believe that this man was actually the great Philoctetes.
Phil told Krishcules that he could prove who he was. He took Krishcules to his home. The entire house was decorated with statues of all those who he had trained. The statues each had a weapon in hand. Only the great Philoctetes could have these weapons, so Krishcules knew that he must be telling the truth. He agreed to the training.
Ten years had passed. Krishcules was now a great warrior ready to fight anything that threatens his people. The issue with being so powerful is that it invites challenge. The wind Titan took Krishcules as a challenge.
Krishcules sprang into action. Using his mighty grip he choked the Titan. The Titan was unable to breathe and died at Krishcules hands.
Author's Note: I combined "Hercules" and the story of Krishna fighting Trinavarta, the wind demon. In "Hercules" Hercules is the son of Zeus and grows up thinking he is normal, but then a great trainer named Phil finds him and trains him. He ends up defeating many beasts, ultimately having to fight the 4 elemental Titans, one of which was the wind Titan. In the Krishna tale, Krishna chokes the wind demon, Trinavarta to death to protect his village. I saw many similarities between the two stories and decided to combine them.
Bibliography:
Epified Author: Vijayendra Mohanty
Hey Zach! I though you had a pretty cool story this week. I like the story of Hercules, and I like that you were able to work him into an Indian Epics story. You have a type in the fourth paragraph. You say “greatest trainer of in the world” which is obviously a bit of a slip up. Great story this week!
ReplyDeleteHey Zach, I liked that you combined the story of “Hercules” with one of the stories of Krishna. I have chosen to read the Krishna stories but if there in one where he battles a wind god I can see how it would be parallel to Hercules. I was confused on if Krishna was born with incredible strength or if he was taught how to use the weapon by Phil that made him able to defeat the wind god. Great story, I hope I have a chance to come back and read more.
ReplyDeleteHi Zach! Along with Ashley and Chris, I loved that you combined this story with the well-known story of Hercules. I think that adds an element in which your reader's can relate. To strengthen your story, I think that you could add dialogue. It can get redundant or bland to read a story without dialogue, but once you add dialogue, the story comes to life! This was a great story, and I hope I get to read more!
ReplyDeleteHey Zach! I really enjoyed reading your story. It was interesting to see how you mixed Greek culture with Indian. It made for an interesting take on the epic. I do agree with the other comments, in that adding some dialogue between the characters would help develop the story even more. But, overall, I had a lot of fun reading what you have to say about the readings this week.
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